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Wheels within Wheels

Written for Friday Fast Fiction. 100 word, photo prompt. Photo by Ted Strutz.

 

If  Steven had premonitions of the future, as did the crafty former owner, who later boasted he had sold him a dummy, he would never have bought the shop.

The business began to prosper but Steven became despondent on hearing the ex-proprietor broadcasting how he had tricked him and was himself opening a similar business on the same street.

Steven’s wife mentioned the bad news to  Mazy Gottalot, a wealthy spinster, and friend, who owned that property.

It came as a pleasant surprise when Steven learned Mazy Gottalot had stipulated this house could not be opened as a shop.

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30 comments on “Wheels within Wheels

  1. rochellewisoff
    December 27, 2017

    Dear Bryan,

    Doesn’t sound like Steven’s competition is going to do much business. 😉 Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

  2. Miles Rost
    December 27, 2017

    37th Rule of Acquisition: Do not boast about tricking a mark until after you utterly destroy them. So says Quark! Well done!

    Liked by 2 people

    • bbryanthomas
      December 27, 2017

      Thanks Miles. Quark’s right but Steven’s a nice
      guy, which won’t help in business

      Like

  3. Christine Goodnough
    December 27, 2017

    With all those strings being pulled behind the scenes, those whirling wheels must be spinning intriguing yarns. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  4. James
    December 27, 2017

    Ha! The rascal is undone.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Kelvin M. Knight's blog
    December 27, 2017

    I read it twice before their wheels span in my mind. It’s all about who you know, spinning for you, right?

    Like

  6. Sandra
    December 27, 2017

    Planning (permission) is everything.

    Like

    • bbryanthomas
      December 27, 2017

      Contacts also help

      Like

  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    December 27, 2017

    Ha… sounds like a great comeuppance…

    Like

    • bbryanthomas
      December 27, 2017

      Regardless, he’ll probably try and open another one nearby

      Like

  8. granonine
    December 27, 2017

    Ah, poetic justice prevails 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  9. Iain Kelly
    December 27, 2017

    All turned out well in the end.

    Liked by 1 person

  10. pennygadd51
    December 27, 2017

    Steven’s wife sounds more astute than Steven. Perhaps he should ask her advice before his next investment – she might know the best person to fix things for him!

    Liked by 2 people

    • bbryanthomas
      December 28, 2017

      Always listen to the missis

      Liked by 1 person

  11. Bridgesburning Chris
    December 28, 2017

    Gottalot of sense I would say!

    Liked by 1 person

  12. Clare Hempstead
    December 28, 2017

    No doubt the former proprietor will try again!

    Liked by 1 person

  13. Balaka
    December 28, 2017

    AS you sow, so shall you reap..

    Liked by 1 person

  14. anuragbakhshi
    December 28, 2017

    So the crafty former owner was not so crafty after all!

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Lynn Love
    December 28, 2017

    Serves the former right for being such a braggart! Nicely done Bryan

    Liked by 1 person

  16. Dale
    December 28, 2017

    Karma, baby! In this case, in the form of Mrs. Gottalot!

    Liked by 1 person

  17. michaelwynnauthor
    December 29, 2017

    Ha, saved by a right minded benefactor

    Liked by 1 person

  18. Alicia Jamtaas
    December 29, 2017

    A lovely twist at the end! Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  19. The twist at the end did the trick. Greatly enjoyed this and HAPPY NEW YEAR.

    Liked by 1 person

    • bbryanthomas
      December 30, 2017

      …and to you kind sir

      Like

  20. Dawn M. Miller
    December 30, 2017

    Nice guy finishes….somewhat in the middle 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  21. Dahlia
    January 1, 2018

    Nicely done Bryan!

    Like

  22. Love it! A trickster gets his karma.

    Liked by 1 person

  23. patriciaruthsusan
    January 2, 2018

    That was more than sufficient payback to right a wrong. Good for Steven. Good writing, B.Bryan. 🙂 — Suzanne

    Liked by 1 person

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